Author's Note: As I began writing a creative piece for the week, my story grew longer than I expected it would. So, in the meantime while I finish it, here's an excerpt from the beginning of the piece.
Throughout the entire city of Tulsa, Oklahoma, there are only three sounds you can hear; the fast whistling of the wind as a forms a funnel in the sky, tearing up the horizon, the terrified screams of parents demanding their kids come inside and take cover from the storm and my laughter.
Some say I'm mad, and others refer to me as broken, but in all honesty, none of that is true. I may have gone through a hard time, a time that many people would not be able to bare, but it left me as the same sane soul as I've always been -- okay, so maybe I wasn't really sane to begin with.
I love the first sentence. It's a great "grabber". But maybe when your listing them off you could put numbers, or make the sentences shorter. just cause while your reading it you lose track of the three things. Just a suggestion though I love it the way it is:)
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